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More Fiction Written by Caleb: Thunderstorm, Part 1

Hello everyone! This week I will share some more fiction by Caleb, my little brother.

Some of you may have read his last story, Poppleton’s New House. Caleb is now coming back to us with another fan fiction, this time about the Disney Pixar movie, Cars.

Caleb has always loved cars, so when he was younger, I wrote little short car stories for him. Now he has adopted my idea and written a car story of his own.

This is part one of Caleb’s story, Thunderstorm. Enjoy!

Thunderstorm – Fiction by Caleb Batie

Chapter 1

Thunderstorm was a brave car. He was a hero. Everyone cheered when he did something good. He was a race car, too. He was a famous racer. He was number one.

Chapter 2

He won almost every time. He won so so much prizes. But one day, his dad Bruno said he could not race for a while. But one night, there was a race in the night and he went to it because he would win it.

Chapter 3

But his dad knew there was a race and he went to it too. And when the race started, he said, “Is that my son? It is my son! Wait! Stop the race!”

And the owner said, “We already started it!”

“But that’s my son! You have to let the race stop!”

Chapter 4

And the owner said, “We can’t!”

And Bruno said, “I’m scared! He’s gonna get hurt!” But the cars already started racing. And Bruno said, “No!” But Thunderstorm already went into the Darkflash cave. There’s lights flashing in the cave.

Chapter 5

In the cave it is dark and the flashing lights scare you. And Thunderstorm got out of the cave, and he was the first one out of the cave. Then Shadowfast Brantesco zoomed ahead and Thunderstorm said, “What?! Who is that?”

Chapter 6

And then Fireblast Speedson said, “That’s Shadowfast Brantesco. He’s one of the famous race cars. He wins almost all the times. Every race track.”

And Thunderstorm said, “Wow! He’s fast!”

Fireblast Speedson said, “Yeah, he is fast.”

Chapter 7

Thunderstorm said, “Let’s beat him! Turn up the speed.”

Vrrrrrrrrrrmmmmm…” Shadowfast Brantesco zoomed ahead again. “That’s better. Now I’m ahead of him. Vrrrrrrrrrrmmmmmm…”

“How did he just do that?” said Thunderstorm.

Fireblast Speedson said, “Let’s put some fire out. VRRRRRRRRRRRMMMMMMM… Yeah! Now he won’t get ahead of me.”

Chapter 8

BOOOOOOMMMMM!!!! “Thunderstorm has popped a tire!” said the owner of the race.

To be continued…

So that’s it! Here is some of the original handwritten manuscript:

Fiction by Caleb - Thunderstorm Car Page 1
Fiction by Caleb - Thunderstorm Page 2

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20 responses to “More Fiction Written by Caleb: Thunderstorm, Part 1”

  1. […] couple of weeks ago, my little brother, Caleb, posted another one of his fan fiction stories, Thunderstorm. He just finished the story, so you all can read the second part of it! If you haven’t read […]

  2. Candy Avatar

    Amazing job Caleb! Keep it up!!

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thank you so much! I love your name. “

      1. Candy Avatar

        Awww…thank you Caleb

  3. patty baerg Avatar
    patty baerg

    Caleb,

    You are an amazing boy! You did such a good job on your story about Thunderstorm! Keep up the good work; I am so proud of you.

    Grandma Patty

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thanks, I love you so so so so so much. And I will write another cute book. And way more pig books.”

  4. Emma Avatar

    This is so cute!!

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thanks, and I will always make my stories cute. “

  5. Amelia Avatar
    Amelia

    Awww, I like it!! He needs to keep writing!! This kid is going to GO PLACES Lord willing!! 😀

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Well, I will always be a professional at writing books.”

  6. Ava Coulter Avatar
    Ava Coulter

    I love this! Great work, Caleb!!

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thanks!”

  7. Rose Avatar

    I like that he’s already learning to keep suspense between chapters…
    XD
    Though I think I preferred the Poppleton one. That’s one of my favorite series, too! Tell him to keep up the good work! 🙂

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Yeah, I will keep up the good work! And I might write another story about some more cars and some more pigs. And maybe some more people.”

  8. Joelle Stone Avatar

    Aw, this was great!! Looks like your parents have another young writer on their hands… 😛

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thanks, Joelle!”

  9. Micah Avatar

    Hey, I couldn’t stop reading it! XD

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thanks! Yeah, I think I’m gonna make a climax in the next part of the story I post.”

  10. Meredith Avatar
    Meredith

    Wonderful job Caleb! I’m so excited to hear more!

    1. Annabelle Avatar
      Annabelle

      Caleb says, “Thank you, and I’m excited to write more too.”

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